//Your writing is improving, I think. 🙂
//It seems you want to give the reader glances into what happens later in the text, written like Mundy’s mind running to the later events. This can be very interesting, if used correctly.
//”I didn’t see life pods. Dammit. I didn’t see life pods.” This was very effective.
//”Blaze is processing the lifepod experience, but his trust in superior officers seemed to be wavering” It’s interesting to see how others one’s view in-character talk.