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Matsiyan
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//Very nicely written.

I missed that shift and it is good to know what happened. It certainly seems that I need to improve my nanite scanning techniques!

Writing it as a story was a good device to see what the professional log would look like and yet still be able to explain Blaze’s thoughts and viewpoint and add some environmental background.
The written English is very good. The clarity of expression and the correctness is better than many native speakers achieve. I noted some minor grammatical changes that I will send you privately.

Thanks, I look forward to more!