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Xavier
Keymaster

Like the story. Some great ideas in there. Just a couple of things/ edits:

was on ration at the few remaining

Should this read ‘was on station’?

Would it be alright to just rephrase a couple of things when I post it up to? For example:

He was desperately wanting to recount the last duty shift in some way.

Just a minor change to:

‘He desperately wanted to recount the last shift in some way’

I hope you don’t mind me critiquing; my aim is to be constructive. The stuff you’re producing is great.